吴建业老师：超强写作模板
1. 妇女犯罪
Causes:
1. The rapid development of society and the changes of people’s value of the world account mainly for the issue.
2. With the eye-catching development of economy, many young women go out to find a job, which renders them more opportunities to contact the outside world.
3. Women’s quality attributes partly to the rise of criminal rate.
4.The prosperity and luxury in some metropolises are very attractive to some young women.
5. Some of women leave the countryside in the hope that they can make a good fortune in the cities, where they often find themselves disappointed for lack of good education or skills.
6. The over-description of violence on the media leads young women astray.
Suggestion:
1. The government should pay more attention to the problem and issue relevant laws to crack down young women crimes.
2. We should strengthen education and raise the quality of people, helping them set up a correct outlook of the world.
2. 家庭和睦问题
Causes:
1. Mobility. Nowadays many jobs require workers who are ready and able to move off the land and to move again whenever necessary.
2. Changes in customs and habits have a significant impact on people’s concept of and attitude towards familial life.
3. Fierce competition. One has to work and study hard to meet the demand of society and face the challenge. Both husband and wife have to go out work full-time to support the family. Too occupied to spare time for one’s family.
4. In this busy modern world in which material things are much valued, people are attaching less importance to emotion and therefore are growing more and more isolated and indifferent.
5. While fast urban development enables people to enjoy better living conditions, people have to spend more on commuting every day.
Suggestion:
1. Keep this line of communication open. Frank exchanges are of great importance.
2. Eat as a family. Dinner is a valuable opportunity for the family to spend time together.
3. Never bring your office work home, and always keep in mind that home is home.
4 Share the same pastimes.
5. A loving atmosphere. Do what you can to create a tranquil harmonious home.
6. When you are out, make sure that you call home regularly.
3. 新生总是会由不适应的问题，为什么，如何解决
Causes:
1. Part of the difficulties they face over this period is due to a changed academic environment.
2. When proceeding to a university or a new school overseas, a student may face a different set of academic norms and expectations.
3. Challenges also come from their peers. To ensure that their study performance is equal to or better than their fellow students, they need to work very hard, under great psychological pressure.
4. For many students, this may be their first foray beyond the borders of the family home, perhaps living in another city or country.
5. These new students are likely to find it hard to get used to and blend into the local culture, especially in the case of overseas students.
Suggestion:
1. School authorities may play an important role in helping students to settle in.
2. The orientation program could last long enough to enable students to feel at home.
3. Such programs should be on a more individual basis so that new students can get a clearer picture of school rules and facilities.
4. It would be a good idea for schools to organize some excursions and outings during the first days.
4. 私立学校
Public School
1、 Public education is the fundamental way to prepare children from diverse ethnic，religious，and class backgrounds to live as responsible citizens in a democracy。
2、 The tuition of public schools in China is comparatively low, thus enabling the poor children to have easier access to education.3、 Serve the lower and middle class minority, reducing disparities
between disadvantaged and other students.
4、 There is little possibility that a public school will go bankrupt for it is financed by the government.
5、 Providing all parents-not just well off parents-with expanded choices regarding where their children attend school, and the format of the education they receive.
Private School
1、 Offer specific educational / vocational programs.
2、 Relieve the government of part of the burden of financing so many schools.
3、 End the state monopoly of educational system.
4、 First class teaching facilities, advanced equipment and beautiful environment.
5、 Private schools can better tailor their programs to attract students with particular interests or learning styles, thus providing a better match for students’ unique educational needs.
5. 该不该安装摄像枪
1. Ensure the security and develop a sense of safety in the residents because today even the best neighborhoods are ripe for burglaries.
2. Provide clues and evidence and help police solve the cases and trace the criminals.
3. Deter/scare off/frighten some would-be criminals.
4. Reduce the labor intensity of police and thus cut down on the governmental budget in this aspect.
5. Remind people to be careful with their speech and conducts.
6. Refrain from indecent behavior.
Against:
1. A brazen intrusion upon one’s dignity.
2. Costly installation and maintenance; a strain on the budget of the residents.
3. Doubts about its function-not as useful as expected. Some sensational felonies are reported to have taken place in some well-equipped residential areas.
4. Possibilities of being abused by some evil persons for some ulterior motives. The materials obtained may be used to blackmail somebody.
5. Privacy should be given priority.
6. 寄宿学校
Advantages:
1. Cultivate spirit of independence. Learn to take care of oneself.
2. Being far away from home at an early age, children can learn to be independent sooner.
3. Learn to cooperate and tolerate. Develop a sense of team work and collectivism.
4. Far from home, children are less likely to be spoiled by their family members.
Disadvantages:
1. Lack of adequate communication and emotional exchange with parents leads to the widening of generation gap.
2. Be prone to negative influence/distractible.
3. Potential danger and risk.
4. Homesick and lonely if not used to the campus life.
5. Extra expenditure/too expensive.
优秀作文点评
Recent years have witnessed（好词） a worsening trend in road safety. According to statistics from the local authority, the number of traffic accidents in 2004 was 20% greater than that of the previous year. The issue is gaining more and more concern of the public, some of whom（定语从句） propose that stricter punishment on traffic offenders should be the only way to ensure road safety. As far as I am concerned, I hold that punishment should not be only solution to the problem.
There is certainly no denying that stricter penalties may to some extent bring down the number of accidents on motorways as a deterrent to driving offences. Besides, the government may enjoy a greater revenue from severer fines, which can in turn be used to improve road conditions.
However, we shall never overlook the other side of the coin: punishment has its downsides. Fines, as the most common penalty for driving violations, tend to instill in people the misconception that money can pay off their guilt and resolve the problem. As a result, we can see many cases where the traffic offender commits the same or another mistake even after having been fined a lot. In spite of heavier punishment, road safety cannot be enhanced unless drivers are equipped with sufficient driving skills and knowledge. Recently there have emerged many irresponsible driving schools that have produced a host of unqualified drivers, contributing to more traffic offences. Thus tight control on driving schools and the driving testing system is needed as well to improve road safety. Furthermore, advertisements and campaigns concerned should be launched to raise the public awareness. When people are fully aware of the importance of abiding traffic rules, accidents may hopefully be eliminated.
From the above discussion, it is clear that only stricter punishment is not enough to enhance road safety. Instead, it should go hand in hand with closer control on driving schools and the testing system as well as higher public awareness.
吴老师点评：
一、结构合理，重点突出。作者采用了一面倒的其中一种形式（类似于教材的第二篇范文）: 在第一段引用数据，引起读者对交通问题的重视，同时开门见山提出对方观点，表明自己的立场。第二段略略承认对方观点的合理性，而第三段阐述自己的看法，最后总结。
二、句式多样，体现扎实的语法功底。不断变化句式，有繁有简，能够熟练巧妙的运用套句，不露痕迹。红色字体标识的为各种句式和套句。
三、用词精确，搭配合理,善于换用同义表达。如：improve road safety, enhance road safety, raise the public awareness, ensure road safety, bring down the number等等 |
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