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Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?青少年犯了重罪，比如抢劫，暴力袭击，应该像成年人一样被惩罚，你的观点？
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解析
青少年犯罪后是否应该受到与成年人同样的惩罚？这个考题在近几年出现过3次，分别是2013年11月9日，2015年4月25日，2015年6月18日。另外，2016年1月14日的考题也与这个话题十分相似。关于如何惩罚青少年罪犯的话题，无非都是围绕着是否应该把他们关进监狱，他们得到惩罚，受到教育，从而变成一个更好的公民，其他的办法无非是让他们免费做义工，让他们在学习中改正错误。
很多同学很害怕犯罪话题，总觉得这个话题比较抽象，难以论证。事实上，雅思考试中，无论面对哪个话题，烤鸭都应该在审题过程中，多想想这个话题与我们的日常生活有什么关联（包括衣食住行，学习，友谊，交流等），而不是将话题引向高深的哲学推理或者某个专业领域。以这种方法，我们就会发现，没有哪个雅思话题是远离我们生活的，我们都能顺利找到入题的方法。老雅就以本题为例，告诉大家，一个貌似高深的犯罪话题，如何可以轻松论证，四两拨千斤，得到自己理想的分数。
面对本次考试题目（乃至犯罪话题），即年轻人犯罪是否该受到与成年人同样的惩罚，多数同学第一时间想到的可能是：应该，因为这体现了社会公正；或者，不应该，因为青少年应该给机会改过自新。然后就开始冥思苦想，怎么论证这个社会公正问题，或者青少年如何改过自新的问题。这种思维方式，就把你的写作带入到了一个艰难的死胡同，最痛苦的情况可能是一条无法走出的死胡同。比如：社会公正问题论证起来，远不是一般同学可以用英语做到的（即使用汉语都有问题），于是，这样的同学就开始哀叹：这个题目真太难写了！但是，事实是这样吗？非也，事实是你的思维出了毛病：你没有真正把握住题目要求，也没有掌握雅思写作的正确思维方式！那么，如何转换这个思维方式呢？我们是否可以这样思考：青少年罪犯如果受到与成年人同样的处罚（比如关进监狱），对青少年是好还是坏？对这个社会是好还是坏？这样一思考，我们就有话可说了。受到同样处罚，有利于青少年尽快认识错误，改过自新，从而对整个社会也有好处；如果从轻处罚，青少年则难以吸取教训，对他们的未来不利，对社会的安全也不利。这样写，你不仅避免了社会公正这样抽象的死胡同，也会觉得250个字的空间太小了！
以下点击查看若干个版本的范文：
解析：本题属于犯罪类话题中关于惩罚措施的探讨范畴。考生在答题过程中应该灵活使用犯罪类话题词汇和短语，以及分情况讨论犯罪主体的行为特征进而使得文章的论点和论述更加符合社会实际情况。此外，关于犯罪类话题的素材也比较局限，考生可以在备考过程中系统地整理出一些通用的导致犯罪的原因以及惩罚罪犯的方式，以便在考场上应对自如。
1、参考范文：
Nowadays, there has been a growing concern that more youngsters are involved in crimes. In order to deter this tendency, some people advocate that like adults, those young offenders are supposed be imposed on the same punishment. As far as I am concerned, this practice is feasible on the condition that they commit criminal wrongdoings more than once.
It is generally believed that many young people go astray due to a lack of proper legal education. Obviously, some of them do not have a clear understanding of the consequence of behaviors when they commit crimes at the first time. Under such a circumstance, enforcing them to attend law courses rather than stiff penalty serves the purpose of educating them the importance of obeying laws and regulations. As a result, it is less likely for them to pose future damage to the society and innocent citizens.
In addition, unpaid community services can be an optional method. Juveniles are able to gain the sense of achievement and enough attention through engaging in activities such as fending for the elderly whose children live far away from them; doing laundry and cleaning in nursing home or just accompanying them for one or two hours a day. As the survey indicated that the motive of repeated juvenile delinquency is mainly to prove self-value, this softer punishment enables them to become productive social members and make contributions to the community development.
On the other hand, that is not to say that those underage criminals who can never learn the lesson and keep crossing the bottom line of the legal system would get rid of a serve sentence. The fairness of justice system will be doubted by people if it forgives a law breaker again and again. Therefore, no matter how young the offender is, committing serious crimes secondly deserves equivalent treatment as adults.
In conclusion, I believe that naive and young as criminals are, rigorous education and chances should be offered to them. However, if only they behave criminally again, there is no excuse to escape from being punished as adults.
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2、参考范文：
Juvenile delinquency is becoming increasingly common in many countries and how to prevent it has long been a topic of debate. In my opinion, young criminals should be punished by law, but their age and the root cause of this problem should also be considered.
It is customary practice in many parts of the world to treat juvenile delinquents differently from adult criminals. This is because the society is more lenient with young people who make mistakes. Adolescence is a special period, in which young people tend to lack self-control and the ability to judge right from wrong. When they grow up to adults, many of them would come to realize how silly they were and then become law- abiding citizens. Therefore, it i' reasonable to mitigate the punishment when dealing with young criminals, since their damage to the society is not as serious as that of adult criminals.
In addition, if we look into the underlying causes of juvenile delinquency, it is the family and social environment that should be primarily responsible for this problem. In many families, parents are too busy to supervise children's growth, or their permissiveness encourages children's wrong behavior. TV _programs and video games inundated with violence also contribute to the increasing youth crimes. With these factors taken into consideration, it seems unjustified to treat young criminals in the same way as adults.
Overall, young offenders should be punished by law, particularly when their crimes pose a threat to the security of the society. However, the minors' rights need to be protected and the punishment on them should be different from that on adults.（268 words）
3、参考范文：
It is argued that, when a teenager commits a crime, even a serious crime such as robbery or sexual molestation, he should not be given the same punishment as an adult criminal. Instead of being put into prison, as these people would suggest, the young criminal should be ordered to do some community services so that they can learn from their mistakes. Quite contrary to this popular belief, I think all criminals, no matter how young they are, should be put into jail and how long they should stay there depends on the severity of their crime.
（1）开头段引出话题和观点。
（2）It is argued that… 有人认为……
（3）Instead of 不是……
（4）Quite contrary to this popular belief… 与这个普遍观点相反的是……
（5）Depend on 取决于……
Firstly, prison is a good place for young people to think again what wrong they have done to other people. When put into jail, the young people will have little to do but read and think about their past. There are also many people who will help the young people understand why what they have done before is not socially acceptable. In this way, these young criminals will have a better chance to come back to normal life. On the contrary, if they are just ordered to community services, they may very likelyend up repeating their mistakes.
（1）本段讨论原因一：监狱是青少年罪犯反思的好地方。注意论证逻辑：监狱是让年轻犯人思考的好地方--监狱里，他们有时间学习和思考--监狱里还有人帮助他们认识到错误--这样，他们就有机会重新回归正常--如果不这样，他们可能重蹈覆辙。【是不是很简单清晰的论证逻辑？】
（2）When put into prison, the young people will have nothing to do but read and think about their past. 这句中的put into prison是过去分词短语，做时间状语。如果写成这样也是可以的：When they are put into prison, the young people will…
（3）Come back to normal life 回归正常生活
Secondly, for these young criminals, their experience in prison may help prevent them fromcommitting more crimes. Once they have been put into jail, they will never forget this experience. So, next time when they think of doing anything wrong, their memory of the prison will immediately return and then they may stop. The memory of doing community services, I believe, does not have this function.
（1）本段讨论原因之二：监狱经历对年轻犯人的心理影响。
（2）commit more crimes 犯更多罪行
（3）Think of doing… 想做……
Therefore, my opinion is that, like an adult law violator, the teenager should also go to prison he commits serious crimes because this experience in prison may enable them to become a better person. Other forms of punishment may be useful, yet I do not think they are as effective as prison.
（1）本段为结论段，重申观点。
（2）Law violator 犯法的人
（3）enable them to do…使他们能够做……
4、参考范文：
It is sometimes argued that young lawbreakers should be tried as adults for crimes. I personally believe that this is partly reasonable.
On the one hand, those who participate in violent crimes should not be treated differently than adult offenders. This is because most crimes, such as rape or murder, are thoughtful, deliberate and cunning in its planning and execution. If our courts trend toward a more lenient position, then the related laws and punishment will not have a deterring effect on teenagers. As a result, teenagers are likely to commit horrible crimes since they are aware that they have legal protection. What's worse, these teens might recommit after they are released from jails. In some cases, the lighter sentencing might also lead to resentment towards the judicial system as victims might argue that these young offenders do not confess what they have done. This could also result in insecurity in our society eventually.
On the other hand, the circumstances of a crime and its motivation should be taken into consideration when it comes to juvenile delinquency. For example, because of distress and hunger, some teens may turn to stealing food or robbery during a period of famine. Under this circumstance, harsh punishment, such as long-term jail might not be the best solution. In my view, most of the young offenders lack parenting and self-discipline, which would mean that other alternatives, such as community service and rehabilitation might be better alternatives for them.
In conclusion, I feel that it is vitally important for judges and state legislators to ensure the justice equality regardless of the criminal's age.
2017年5月6日雅思小作文真题范文：柱状图
The chart below gives information about the possession of newer technologies by different age groups in UK in 2009.
Summarize important information, and make comparison and contrast.
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解析：该柱图考题不管是柱子的数目还是横轴组别的内容都比较多。考生在处理此类图形时，务必选取合理的写作层次以及关注柱子之间的高低对比，尽可能替换语句表达和挑选重要特征描述。
The bar chart illustrates how many people of four different age groups possessed newer technologies in UK in 2009.
It can be seen that the same percentage of 17-23-year-olds and 24-44-year old people owned mobile phones, at 90%, while more people （ 80%） in latter age group had computers. In addition, the percentage of possession of digital TVs and SatNav system by people aged 24-44 was the highest compared with that for other people.
Referring to other two age groups, it was interesting to note that the figure for 45-64 years old people who possessed computers and mobile phones was equal at 80%. In terms of the other items of newer technologies, the percentage of their possession by this age group both ranked the second place. Obviously, the fewest oldest people had those technological products, with only 9% of them using SatNav system.
Overall, it was clear that most people in four age groups had mobile phones, however, SatNav system was least applied by them. |
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